I got some feedback on this story as well, and have also acted on it. I want to do a series with Danni and Drew, but this is the first story with them I’ve written that’s done enough for public consumption.
I got some great feedback on my Sparkler Monthly contest entry and made some changes based on it. The story is essentially the same, but I’ve tried to clarified some things, and changed the ending, which I wasn’t happy with anyway. But the edits changed the intent of the story, so I had to change the title as well. “A Start” didn’t fit anymore. I think “Someday” does.